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God Ray, that last passage. Absolute gut punch. Fantastic writing

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The scariest short story I've read in some time.

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found myself smiling then had my hand covering my mouth as it all unraveled. absolutely beautiful.

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You sure can write Ray.

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Only way to keep sane!

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Sheesh.

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Fantastic. What a way to start the day.

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This was profound. I’m not sure if it came from real life experience or from real life observation, but you said a lot about life in liquid modernity in this essay. Cheers to you for such a great post, and I look forward to reading more of your writing.

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Much appreciated. It’s a fictional story but inspired by some observations of others.

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I’ve seen some similar situations. Life in this vale of tears can be challenging, for sure

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Fun story. Good decision.

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Really liked this. So relatable and believable. Big talks over tacos. Unexpected choices when you project an uncertain future.

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Damn so so goood 👌👍

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Goddamn, man, wish I could write like this.

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Bro, great fuckin story. Captured teenage boy and pregnancy scare wonderfully. Another “there but for the grace of God, go i”. Loved the whole “my future flashed before my eyes” moment and how quietly you transitioned into it. So well done.

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Thanks so much for taking the time to read. 🙏

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Good writing, great title, fucking nightmare life. Enjoyed it, Ray.

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Oh damn I really liked this one. The whole way his brain just unravels and spitballs. Soo good!

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Poor Mona. People hyping themselves on being the savior for the ego high.

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Read it - and made me get inside the head of a teenage boy in America from "back then". I wondered if he ever found out what happened to her years later... there was a sad undertone to it obviously -- that came through for me.

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