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Michael Arturo's avatar

This is great, Ray. Love your stuff. Sticky and Dark. Hope your back feels better, sounds like you should hit the jacuzzi and let the jets do their work.

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Ray Downs's avatar

That’s actually not a bad idea.

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Shoni's avatar

Your mind is a pretty dark place, Ray. Love the ending though! And the middle. And the beginning. Sorry to hear about your back. Hope it comes good soon.

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Ray Downs's avatar

Thank you!

It’s getting better (I think)

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Sudana Krasniqi's avatar

Havent finished reading yet but he strangles them with the fan cable, right? Right?

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Ray Downs's avatar

He yanks off the fan blade and decapitates the guy on Substack live and gets tons of subs

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Sudana Krasniqi's avatar

Sickkkk

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Jeanne S's avatar

Hope your back improves quickly.

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Ray Downs's avatar

Me too!

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Caleb Caudell's avatar

Love the ending. Good job, Ray

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Nick Winney's avatar

i like the examination of action and effect. tense. you catch the sweatiness. but im not rooting for your guy in the end despite also wanting those others to get it. i mean...hes an accountant for a start...

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Ray Downs's avatar

I get it. He’s not a good guy.

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Logan the Lobotomizer's avatar

Did something like this happen to you? I loved the story!

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Ray Downs's avatar

someone did try to take my fan at an outdoor bar patio when my wife was in the bathroom. I took it back and the people at the table glared at me. Always wanted to make a story with that in it.

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Logan the Lobotomizer's avatar

I remember you saying that people in Miami were just as rude as people in NY.

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Sudana Krasniqi's avatar

Havent finished reading yet but he strangles them with the fan cable, right? Right?

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